Saed Terrice

[Saed]

Name: Saed Terrice

Age: 18


Appearance: A very tall individual, although very skinny.Long uncombed-messy black hair that trails to his mid back, often dressed in a suit with a poet's shirt, and a black leather tie, accompanied with a great coat, sunglasses and pale skin. He wears combat boots that are knee high which also make his walking audible from a distance away.


Personality: Quiet, lets his actions speak for him rather than his words. He prefers the ghost-type, or the dark-type Poke'mon, as he feels they fit his personality fittingly. Although he is a man of little words, he does his best to leave an impact wherever he goes, as he feels it is his duty in life.
Viewing others as ignorant or insufficient to complete the task at hand, Saed often takes matters personally to complete them.


History: Little is known about his history, other than he was spotted in several regions prior to his visit to Airore. Doing what exactly, is unknown.
Despite his mostly unknown history, it IS known that he has never gotten along with students in his schools, and he has a history of anti-social behaviour.


Affiliation: Unknown

[Crazed Lapras]

So I remember reading somewhere that you are new to paragraph role playing. Mind if I offer a few tips?
I understand the general idea of Saed's personality, but because his description is so short he feels like a shallow character. He would seem more real if he was more well rounded. For example, is he so quiet because he had a strange past, or he thinks people who talk alot are silly? What does he fear? What does he like? If he thinks actions speak louder than words, what kind of actions? Friendly ones or violent ones or subtle ones? Does this make him especially attracted to powerful pokemon? You don't have to write an entire page, but give us at least five sentences to work with.

[Saed]

I have updated the previous information. Sorry, I am new at paragraph RP.

[Crazed Lapras]

Don't be sorry, its the only way to learn. Approved.